Okay, so this may be a really REALLY strange critic but I freeking ADORE THE RHYTHM in this. The way your paragraphs sort of are long short long short, and then pick up to long and taper off to short. It's like you mean for it to be written out loud. I caught my mouth moving with it. I really love that in a work, it makes it engaging.
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branchandroot
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Date: 2009-11-19 12:07 am (UTC)